For the next series of blogs, I plan to develop my writing skills by practicing how to leads for my feature story in my magazine. This is the final one.
Lead Title: A concerning report is nothing more than a child's lie
Lead Description: A concerned mother goes to the police after she suspects her child had been beaten by his teacher
Practice Example:
The police in this municipality received a call at 3:45 p.m. yesterday afternoon. A woman shouted at the sergeant who answered the telephone. She said: "My son's been beaten. His teacher whipped him this afternoon, and he's all red where she paddled him. Can teachers do that? That's assault and battery, and I want her arrested." Two police officers were sent to the home. They questioned the boy, who is 9 years old. At his mother's insistence, the police officers also inspected the boy's reported injuries. They reported: "We couldn't tell that the boy had been paddled. His fanny didn't look red to us, but we did notice that his pants legs were wet and muddy. As we talked, it became obvious that he boy was lying. He finally admitted that he had stopped to play on the way home from school, forgot the time and got home late. He told his mother that the teacher had spanked him and kept him after school. His mother was there with us and heard the whole story. She said she'd take of the situation, and we're quite certain that she will, as she was very embarrassed. In fact, we could hear her giving the kid a real paddling as we left—and a hard one."
Feature Lead:
"My son's been beaten. His teacher whipped him this afternoon, and he's all red where she paddled him" a mother cry's to the police officers. The two officers visited the mothers home to question her son on the events. But it was clear that he was lying as he had no red marks. The boy had lied. In fact, we could hear her giving the kid a real paddling as we left—and a hard one."
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